Character notes for two book length works

The line numbers and semi-poetic feel are because I was writing in Vim. I didn’t realize when I switched between the two works.
244 if the heroine is the “swamp creature”,
245 there is also a “dinosaur”, an old coder
246 one who was instrumental in developing the framework
247 that the virtual worlds run on, one of the first generation
248 it’s the second generation now that is riding on his coattails
249 and trying to force him out, now he’s (unfairly) like Melvin
250 (in his social role, not in his real personality)
251 when he “burns the place down” it’s to put the system on lockdown,
252 or some other desperation move to get some respect
253 that ultimately benefits the heroine (they never knowingly meet)
254 the “kids” harass him by cramping up his office with partitions,
255 so that he has to walk a maze to get in and out
256 finally they miscalculate and close him off completely
257 (taken with heroine’s, metaphor for “they put you in a box”)
258 that is another forced breaking point,
259 parallelling the swamp monster traansformation–
260 it’s not just that he’s had enough,
261 it’s that he literally can’t do anything else
262 except interact with his “terminal” or lay down and rot,
263 which will be his only choice when they cut it off next
264 how did he get here? he has been an “individual contributor”
265 who believes people do best when left to lead themselves
266 (and as far as it goes, he’s right)
267 he is deeply principled about this (and other things),
268 and he finds the point where the principle breaks down
269 and other ones need to be invoked
270 his loyalty to principles, patience, etc
271 make him look weak to the above-the-law 2nd generation
272 his appearance is not necessarily bearded old emacs user,
273 but the equivalent of that when you don’t age, etc
274 like he never bothered to tweak it after uploading
275 (except maybe for convenience, an extra finger or something)
277 her love interest and character arc:
278 she has to learn to be a leader, she is being walked on
279 by everyone from the evil bad guy boss to the squirrels
280 it starts to click when she asks the squirrels
281 who uplifted them, and tries to trace the problem back to roots
282 (the young squirrels, 2nd gen & after, don’t know
283 (squirrels 2-3 gens a year in warm climates?)
284 they have to dig up one of the old timers
285 then come get her later, s/he leads heroine
286 on a parkour course to find the geek kids in the bedroom
287 heroine’s name should be “anne” or something
288 that sounds like a squirrel call
289 the squirrlels are hard to understand, bc of their poor uplift)
290 (when she confronts teh geek kids, she expects dudebros,
291 is all ready to give them a piece of her mind,
292 but then she sees two scared little black girls
293 they want a career in uplift science with all their hearts,
294 but went through the proper channels–
295 applied to programs at —
296 but were shut out because of
297 (they “failed” an unofficial prior step
298 because they had no money, for ex)
299 and they have actually worked a miracle with skimpy/stolen gear
300 she helps them get proper sponsorship–her first true leadership
301 calls in an old favor, like should have happened in an office
302 goons at have been abusive toward them of course)
303 the love interest is a benevolent social engineer
304 who is using his charisma and leadership abilities
305 (think eddie murphy, socially flirtatious, but with real substance)
306 to try to influence the culture at the company for the better
307 she doesn’t understaand his “entertaining” manner
308 she thinks he is a pua, or some type of borderline harasser
309 (deepen the confusion by introducing a real harasser,
310 maybe bad guy boss himself, or a quisling or confused animal)
311 after she transforms, and looks at him
312 through the eyes of a leadaer, she sees their connection
314 needed: more animals throughout the company, and broadly
315 (Do I have more on this already?)
316 heroine’s sidekick: a gray parrot (unfortunately named Paulie)
317 talking dogs, tons of em, armies–topic of controversy, conspiracy
318 a trickster and general PITA, maybe monkey or raccoon, good bad or neutral
319 (maybe teases her about “bestiality”, shows her
320 the dream of the fisherman’s wife,
321 she insists “will never happen” buts he’s really talking
322 about the human love interest)
323 an artist, possibly well loved/icon–make vulnerable
324 a quisling/Cypher, the bad guy boss’ goon
325 (this also happened in paul verhoeven with arnie on mars)


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